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I am a white African. Contradiction in terms? I think not. Sometimes my blog will be serious; sometimes sad; sometimes irreverent; sometimes witty; always my truth simply written.

Sunday, December 5, 2010

SEDUCTION


As
your lips
caressed mine,
I fell in lust.
Your gentle tongue probed
spots I thought forbidden
as eager hands ignited
and excited virginal flesh
till, aching with desire, I cried YES!

As your lips caressed mine, I fell in lust.


Dectina Refrain – a form of poetry invented by Marion Friedenthal and named by Luke Prater.(To my knowledge this is a style of poem I developed myself circa 2007/2008.  I apologise sincerely for that misconception if it is a form that already exists out there.  It is 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9 syllables and then 1-2-3-4 repeated on a separate line.)

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10 comments:

  1. Powerful poem. Hits a peak on the flesh / Yes rhyme. Excellent work. Cheers

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  2. ok - now i know what you meant with straight and to the point...smiles

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  3. It is a powerful form reinforcing the beginning at the end and bringing it full circle. I don't know if it's original or not but you certainly use it originally. Felt the excitement and the fear. Thanks, Gay @beachanny

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  4. Powerful yearning of forbidden desire, given into. Wonderful rhythm.

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  5. oh my, "fell in lust" instead of love... the excitement is felt all the way to the end. pretty hot stuff!

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  6. So glad that it worked. thanks for commenting.:D

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  7. What a beautiful and romantic poem...
    I can hear the kisses...:)
    I am definitely seeing this form for the first time...

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  8. What a passionate poem...so visual and sultry. I like your rhyming pattern. This sort of reminds me of a nonet except in reverse. Nicely written here.

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  9. Yes, The Write Girl, it is similar to a nonet in reverse... I think it is also similar to an etheree except that I only have 9 lines and then repeat the first 4 as the 10th line...

    Glad you enjoyed it.

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